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An Hourglass Figure
#1
I don't write poetry all that often, sometimes I'm moved to do so though.  This is an older piece and Sharps play with form has in turn inspired me to share my own:

An Hourglass Figure

Fine grains of sand sliding
through
my fingers
caught whipping
against my fine skin
caught in my green eyes
blinking away the painful tears
peering through the grit of 
the smoke screen trying
to grasp what was
to see what is
grasping
fine grains
of sand in my hand
sliding through my fingers
(fluid as your silkendark hair)
the light sand scraping my skin
tears stinging my eyes as 
I stand
a blind soul
in a whirlwind
with an empty
hand
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#2
I really like this
And I am pleased to have been able to inspire another person to share a poem on here.

Welcome to the poetry club, Miss C.
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#3
not too much on poetry myself, but I liked that one...
Making a girl smile can be much more rewarding than bedding her...
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#4
Cuylie is a poet now?
Sharp is making a habit of this, making us girls write poems.

It's wonderful, sweetie *cuddles*
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#5
(06-20-2016, 08:19 PM)Sharp Wrote: I really like this
And I am pleased to have been able to inspire another person to share a poem on here.

Welcome to the poetry club, Miss C.

*blushes a bright red* Thank you

(06-21-2016, 12:41 AM)Lexilicious Wrote: Cuylie is a poet now?
Sharp is making a habit of this, making us girls write poems.

It's wonderful, sweetie *cuddles*

Well, I go around critiquing his I only thought it was fair that he got to see mine, even though I make a reluctant poet.
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#6
Niiice merging of poetry and form.
.. Thank you for sharing ;-))
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#7
Oooh, very well done & loved the visuals it put in my mind,as well as the aesthetic of the poem itself.


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#8
That, my dear, deserves a hug. And a small tear.
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