03-20-2016, 11:07 AM
Indeed, a very nice story Chris! You can feel the emotion in it! All the luck for you two! 
But some further advices for future stories. Try to arrange the text some more, and keep a topic in writing. It tend to get a little tiring for the eyes, as you approach the end.
But some further advices for future stories. Try to arrange the text some more, and keep a topic in writing. It tend to get a little tiring for the eyes, as you approach the end.
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