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Comet - -J- - 04-29-2016
To the Warqueen.
(Song in my head: "Frost Waltz" - Kevin MacLeod)
I was unaware
That from my periphery
You would approach me
But approach you did.
My tides accelerated
Like never before.
What did they call you?
Who damaged you so greatly?
Who could be so cruel?
I have better names.
Companion. Friend. Heroine.
Forever revered.
Soon you were taken
By a supergiant star
Who kept you stable.
Frequent encounters
Happily were yet to come
Despite your distance.
The supergiant
Offers what I cannot.
A stable orbit.
My trajectory
Takes me too close to the sun.
You would be destroyed.
I will be patient.
Meet at my aphelion.
Come and rock my world.
. . .
I looked for your trail
But your trajectory changed.
I fear for the worst.
Do not grieve for me.
I will always watch the stars...
... and never forget.
RE: Comet - Bansai - 04-29-2016
I thought this piece will be about your wishes (cause that's usually what people do when they see one), but wow....this is really good too ^^
RE: Comet - Lexirific - 04-29-2016
I love the imagery and metaphors. Stunning!
RE: Comet - LoganAsquer - 04-29-2016
<--- he wanna know more about the Warqueen
RE: Comet - Simple Tania - 04-29-2016
Lovely JC, great lyric song...
RE: Comet - Shiroi Kurēn - 05-02-2016
Nice work JCF, it shows that this person meant a lot to you, and the time and subtlety of your wording is great. A pleasure to read.